Anytime XD
When someone who reads your story and comments seriously on it, they'll tell you mistakes you have to fix, what they like and what not and with writing and writing you'll improve. The plot seems really interesting. XD I love writing stories too. :D You have to use dialogue to make it more interesting and catchy, as for when she's texting you better use BB code.
How did you decide to join?
Hey...what's up? Nice to meet you, I'm Marian by the way! :-) I'm here to welcome you, so welcome to the creative world of Mibbs! :DDD Feel free to ask anything you want! :-) And check out my stuff :-p Also if you want to answer to the comments we give you here, you have to post your reply on our profile/comment page. +_+ Enjoy your stay!