No problem. I really hope nothing I said sounded too harsh, though. It sounds odd, but I only critique stories I like. So... it's a good sign, haha.
Can't wait for the fourth chapter then! :D It'll be interesting to see how you incorporate magic. Out of curiosity, why were you having trouble connecting to how she's perceived? If you don't mind me asking. And I'm glad to hear Kelebek is sticking around for a while, even if she's possibly insane, haha. You definitely did choose well with Sanna. I really like how she handles the situation. She's got an attitude! It's great. :)
Thanks for commenting on my poem! I really appreciate that you took the time to do that, without requiring the return comment (which I gave anyway, because I genuinely enjoyed that story). Thanks again! :)
Bronchitis??? Holy hell. . That stuff will wreck your shit. I'm so glad you're okay though. My sister had that and it was nasty. Wowie I'm sorry you caught that. It sounds awful. did you miss much school?
Hey! Sorry to bug you, but apparently Mibs ate at least one of my messages and I wanted to see if you ever got the one I sent you or not. Sorry to bug you!
I appreciate it. I'm still growing as a writer and it's encouraging knowing that people are enjoying my writing. I think I'm going to so the next part in Rayden's thoughts. I'm still exploring and developing him. He's an interesting character in my mind. Thanks again
Hey thanks for the comment! xD I'm glad you liked my story and I love hearing about people's bands. :) it's totally fine to write a super long paragraph about band.
Its definitely going to have to be more than five chapters-what I've got planned and what is currently kicking my ass right now for chapter five isn't going to work as an ending at all. So it'll at least be one or two more chapters long.