February 18th, 2012 at 12:45am
I don't want to discourage you in anyway, and what I say I don't say with contempt. Trust me, I've written a lot of stuff that makes your story seem like the best novel ever. I just hope you could gain something from all that I said...
I'll re read it when I have some time, I'm just really busy right now.
Please keep writing more!