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You're welcome.

Yay :D

Your welcome :D

Thanks for the friend request and for commenting on wingslax96's and my story. :D

We'll be starting a sequel sometime soon.

It's nightmare industries turn now :D

Oh hey (:
Nice to meet you too .

Hmm, for the time being, I may have to say no. I barely have time to write as it is, and with all the projects I have, I'm kinda pressed as it is. Unless its a small project or something like that. Revisions I can do quick, but a coauthor thing, I may be a bit of a disappointment.

Thanks for commenting on An Ever-Growing Wonder! We hope you like it :D

Hahaha! Yea I tend to go into a little too much detail sometimes. I know that was a lot. I will say this, the animated thing could work too. I think that's more of a preference thing. In all honesty, it kind of fits your stories. Its more just a few little things that I think could make the stories better. Like I said, shits a lot of work, and I am happy to help in any way I can. Just let me know!

Yeah, jackie's a chick. she's based off my fiance who is a soft butch. Thank you for the comment!!

So while I have not read the entirity of your stories yet, I have read through the first chapter or two of each. Quick question, and don't take this the wrong way, because I am a very open minded individual and not judgemental of this sort of thing (I'm more judgemental of the people who are judgenental towards it.) but are you a lesbian? Just kind of noticed the recurring theme there. If so, you're very wise to write about the plights you have gone through. Its always best to write about things you know. They're always the most honest and genuine, and usually make for the best parts. Another thing I've noticed is your writing is very anime inspired. As a man who's watched his share, I can tell an influence when I read it. Now, I will say this, one thing to be careful of is to not make it too manga like... If that makes any sense. Remember their stories are translated into English, and whenever there's a translation, there is always going to be that moment where some things are lost... Now, in saying that, it could just be my personal taste. Just think of how you talk with your friends or how you would talk to this character or he/she would talk to you. This sort of thing helps me write my dialogue... But again this is me. What works for you could be totally different. I noticed a few simple mistakes, but anyone can do that. Its called being human. (I do shit like that all the time.) A major thing I noticed was in the School of Reality story. Theres a part where virtually every sentence starts with "I then..." This is one of those things where ya gotta think of a different way to phrase it. Just a change up in the word play will turn something decent into something really good. But when you're reading something like that, from an outside perspective it sounds somewhat monotonous. If you were the character telling the story, (like actually saying whats written) to someone else, they'd think you were nuts if you kept repeating yourself... Okay... These are things I noticed. I mention them to try and help you in the future. I started writing when I was younger than you and I'm 26 now. This writing thing takes a lot of practice and a lot of dedication. Shit! I'll be damned if I'm perfect at it! I'm still learning! But one thing I've learned is always give an honest opinion. Because they've always helped me. (My mom is one of the most honest people I know for stuff like that.) So keep at it! And I'll read some more another night. For now I gotta go to sleep though. Hope I've helped in some minute way and have in no way discouraged you... Because I assure you, it is not my intent... And I would feel awful were that the case... So please keep writing! The more you do, the better you get! You're stories are good, its just minor things and they'll be even better.

Yea! I will definitely do that some time. :) Promise. It would be an honor.

You're reading the old one eh? That's cool. That one's a little rough. Had a coauthor who wouldn't let me do a lot of the things I wanted. Was sort of learning to write at the same time. (What's funny is, if you do comment, she reads it too... And then I'm gonna hear about it... Long story, but I kind of stopped talking to her... In saying that, you may comment away. I do not mind.) Oh! And that story just gets to be too much. Too many characters to keep track of. (I wasn't allowed to kill anyone! It sucked!) But! The new one is very based off the old story... Just the new one is better. Hahaha!

Hey! Thanks for the comments! Glad you found me again! Mibba had a complete meltodown there. Deleted the zombie story, which I'm reposting a bit slower now. Oh! And if you commented on it, its not coming up... Because I think Mibba is still fuckin up... But I digress. Glad you liked the other story! I'm not 100 percent sure what I'm going to do with it quite yet. So I'm holding off on it for a bit... But... Uh... Yea! Glad you found me again! I got worried!

I'll try to update soon :P

Thank you :D i love wolves so i wanted a story about them

Thank you :D it wont be scary 4 long :P

Thank you for your comment. The sequel is up and in progress. :)

I have a new story up if your interested in reading it :D

Thank you for your comments (on both stories). That's the only mpreg and/or Jalex story I have. Sorry :-/