Hi! Welcome to Mibba! I've read two (er ... both at the time of this writing I guess ...) of your poems and both are very good! I look forward to reading more of your works in the future!
I'd say the most problematic part for me was the very end. The endings I've always paid particular attention to, you know, like all's well that ends well. It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem.
The part to do with the dreams (within a dream, and in this dream within a dream) is very conceptually cool but you don't really slide it in there. It sort of just sits there.
I liked it very much, otherwise. Very sentimental; more than I'm used to, but far from anything but good.
No problem =] let me know if you have any questions!
Nice to meet you, Jenn =3
Yes, anything could go wrong in a week XD
And no worries - I know that when I joined I couldn't figure it out >.<