Thanks for the constructive criticism. :) I read back through and realized their were a lot of spelling errors I didn't catch and I changed up some of the words so they didn't repeat. haha Sorry I have to work on expanding my vocabulary. XD
Thank you so ver' much for commenting on my story. I've somewhat realized my different writing style, and was worried that people would hate it and be all like, "What the fuck is this shit, clogging up my mibba space!". But nothing like that has happend yet :)...the long and short of it; thanks for readin'.
Thanks for the comment. I'm glad that the emotion portrayed through my writing because that was what I was going for. I wrote the last two paragraphs crying actually.