Um, try to reduce the amount of exclamation points you use like "!!!" instead of that use just one or put a comma instead.
Like this:
"Get out of bed," my mom yelled turning on the light to my bedroom. I rolled over groggily and looked at the towering figure in my doorway, "Now," she demanded.
Something like that would be better. Also instead of *** just say time lapse and don't captilize your letters to show emotional use [b][/b] for bold (text goes between them and [i][/i] for italics and [u][/u] underline and [s][/s] to cross things out for example:
[b]text[/b][i]text[/i][u]text[/u][s]text[/s]
Well, I don't know where to start xD
I figured you came from quizilla becuase you could make four million seperate pages of a story. But you can name your chapters One and stuff you dont even have to put in a chapter description you just have to put in a chapter title
Does that help? :]]
Two or anymore than three is incorrect grammar.