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Lol. Yeah. Maybe Astronaut? -shrug- I vaguely remember that.

Haha, thanks for the b-day comment. o_o And I can't wait for you to read! Hehe and good luck on that homework, I know it can be a bitch. ;P

I didn't delete any information. I just never put it there in the first place. It doesn't seem that important to me. Happy??

I'm going to assume you delete all of your information for private reasons.

Your comments on Sophie (Ms Marauder)'s stories got me thinking. I'm one of those people that blubbers on about how amazing she is and how wonderful her descriptions are and how awesome her characters act and how fantabulous her stories are and blah blah blah.
You're very blunt. You tell her what she needs to fix, and you're completely right in doing so. I know that I'm just some random person randomly commenting about random stuff on your empty profile, but I guess I just wanted to let you know that not just the author of that story (Time Lifts the Light) is reading your comments. I found them interesting and challenging and productive in helping the writer improve their skills.

Hehe, could you read my story, 13th Hour? ;P I notice that all of your comments are about your criticism.

(Love that.)

I think I'll aspire to be you. ^.^ <3

I agree with pizzabread. You should check this out, and critisize it. (: She would probably love that.

http://www.mibba.com/story/_95301/Things-Of-Fiction/

Hey there! I really enjoyed the essence of your comment Ms. Marauder, but I think it was just put forward a bit too harshly and turned into a rant at the end...
So, I thought it would be interesting if you we're to read a story which, as far as I know, has none of the faults you listed with Ms. Marauder... I just want to see your feedback on that so here it is:
http://member.mibba.com/49488/
Click on her "when the hunter became the hunted" story.
It would be nice to see the range of critism you would say for that story!

Woah, woah. Hold on there.

I read your comment. I appreciate the criticism. Its always a pleasure to gain a different perspective. I want you to know that you haven't told me anything that I don't already know. My teachers tell me exactly what you've pointed out. I organize my characters logically instead of emotionally or metaphysically, as I should. The result is a very straight-forward style. I'm working on it. (I hope you can see that I've improved, for example, since "Robin Hood" or "Hate".)

[i]"You just make statements about things that have happened and speed through things. You never take the moment to savor the little details. I really wished you had made Daniel’s secret a little more mysterious and take time to explain things. You rely too heavily on your predetermined pictures of your characters."[/i]

Congratulations! You wrote lots of words about my problems but nothing about how you think they could be fixed, thus defeating the "contructive" part of "constructive critisism." And, despite this, you still appear to know exactly what you're talking about!

[i]"If all you care about is the female protagonist getting with her dream man, stop pretending you’re a writer and just write make-out scenes for all the prepubescent girls who don’t even care or even bother to understand anything about a truly good story."[/i]

And then you hurt my feelings by adopting a condescending and pretentious tone! Cool!

I'm trying [i]really hard[/i] not to be bitter. But, [i]come on.[/i] It's Mibba. I'm not exactly obsessing over these stories. I love writing, but I don't get a chance to do my own thing at school. We have very structured and specific assignments. Writing fluffy romance stories is cathartic for me.

You accused me of underestimating my audience's intelligence. If I have done this, I apologize. Just please, don't underestimate [i]mine.[/i]