darci. / Comments

thank you. :]

Sorry I haven't been on in a while, I updated my story and if you read the note at the bottom you'll understand why I haven't been on.

Yeah, it's pretty awesome. I'm getting mad, my sisters starting to interfere with my story so don't pay attention if she comments again.

I don't like my layout, I LOVE it.

Don't worry, I won't stop writing even though I barley manage to find time in my hectic life, today I ended up writing a little bit during social studies class while my teacher was making us watch the Alamo.

I'm still trying to decide if Pete should play a big part of not, he might, I do have a few ideas to with for the story but I'm still not totally sure, I'm sorta playing this by year.

Thanks for the comment. I was really happy with this chapter but I don't particularly like the ending of it and I'm not sure if Pete's going to play a big part in the story of not I just know that he will be in the next chapter.

I am starting to get a little upset about how my story's not taking off so well.

I'm surprised, because your only the 3rd person to say that and I've neve thought of myself as a good writer. I always thought I was horrible.

Oh My Gerard! You really like my story????

Darce,

I read all three chapters of "Finding Daddy." You, m' girl, have a knack for writing. And I'm not saying that just 'cause I'm your cousin. I'm saying it because it's true.

You have a few misspellings and missing words here and there, but I'll save the nitpicks for later when you've completed the story altogether. ;-)

1) You have set up the situation very well. Mali sounds like she is in something of an emotional/social bind just because her mother works and dad's out of the picture. I like the name you picked. It's very unique, and suited to a girl coming from a state as cosmopolitan and beautiful as California. And I really like how you portrayed Mali as a girl with some serious brains going on! :-D Go grrl power! :-D

2) I LOVE how you described Danny. He sounds like an absolute dreamboat of a kid...not only is he talented, he's also nice.

3) How did you come up with his friend Navix's name? Sounds like an interesting mix between Nathan and Xavier. You might want to flesh out Navix's character a bit...give us a tiny bit more insight into who Navix is, even if he's not a high profile character in this story. Perhaps you can give Navix a hobby or passion, like you did with Danny.

I honestly can't wait to read more! You do have the makings of a great writer. Keep at it, girlfriend!

Hugs,
Anna-Kat ^.^

hey darci its may-z add me kay

Yes i love the new chapter!

Hey batman have you read my new chapter

Aw thanks.....that's vury nice of you. It was bad but still. Thank you.

Thanks for the poem comment....you were the one and only person who commented it :(

thanks
all these poems came into my head at like 3am ahaha

thanks :)

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