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No, I didn't finish the sequel. To be completely honest, I just read the first one, and while it isn't the worst thing I've ever seen, I don't exactly like it. Personally, I wouldn't be able to live with Rachael, and I really can't see Jonathan doing it either. I don't think I'll end up finishing the sequel... I just don't like the writing style I went with, and I don't think I can emulate that anymore.

Hey! So I'm just going to address your comment on my JT story. Hopefully it will clear up any confusion. First of all, I haven't so much as thought about that story in at least two years - maybe it's been the full three since I posted the last chapter - so I honestly can't tell you what I was going for (if it was misrepresented). However, with that being said, perhaps her inconsistency was a character trait. It happens. Sometimes people don't practice what they preach... they say one thing, yet completely contradict what they said with how they acted. It's a huge pain in the ass and very annoying when people do it. If you've never come across someone like that, lucky you. But I'm sure if the main character was real she'd be diagnosed with some sort of mental health disorder. Who knows. Anyway, hoped that helped.

Thanks for the review on the book review. >.< If I could fix the problems I would *le sigh* but I can't edit the text what so ever (at least not in which I am aware of as of right now). I did take it as constructive, and appreciate the pinpointing of the bad portions. I've never written a review before in my life so I knew there were going to be some massive mistakes. I probably should have gone over it a second time but I didn't think about it.

Thanks again!

Hi there :D Just letting you know that that story I made ages and ages ago 'Lamposts, Demonic Siblings and a Broken Toaster, Can it Get Any Worse?' has finally been updated, and I've changed the beginning.
Please read and tell me what you think, and what I can do to improve :) Thanks x

Thank you!

I was wondering. You're signature, what are the quoted phrases from? And Please don't think I'm stalking you... I'm not... I went to post a comment on YuffieProduction's story, Stray, and I saw you comment... I promise... I'll go now...

That's one of my favourites too. :)

You're welcome!
Haha, yeah you should feel special! ^__^ I was starting to worry that my hints were too subtle and no one was catching on.
The thing is, though, you won't really be able to find all the details until you know what's going on and then read up about it, which I'm sure more people won't do. :P But if anyone does decide to do some research about the ending, then go back and reread the story, they should be able to find all the subtle hints and technical little details that I put in on purpose. .... AH! This is so difficult because it won't make sense unless you know what's going on, and I really can't tell you that, so I'm dying of anticipation on the inside xD

I will expect nothing less than chewing me out like a starving dog and a steak ^_^

Foreshadowing is hard, man! If you put in too much, then it's just obvious, and if you don't do enough, then no one will understand it. :( It's terribly difficult to find that balance between them, and I'm not sure if I'm doing it well in SH, to tell you the truth. *sigh* We'll see. The biggest foreshadowing was the bathroom scene when Elena thought she saw Hero in her bathroom. *hint hint* Then there'll be another scene soon (probably the next chapter?) with the story of Icarus. I think foreshadowing is good when you mix it with symbolism. You make the symbol foreshadowing--that way it's not too obvious, but people will definitely notice it.

You've actually got a lot of the building blocks for the plan! No one's even figured out that anything was a bit weird about Hero--you're the first, so kudos to you! But you still have to figure out why he was acting so strangely, though. :)

I wasn't referring to the physics when I said research, haha. ;) But I did do a lot of Google'ing and YouTube'ing for the physics stuff, too!

No, I love your comments! Please be as harsh and mean as you'd like! I'd much rather get constructive criticism than pointless gushing about how much they love the story (although those comments do boost my self-confidence :D).

Haha, the majority of this story is foreshadowing. :P It's so much fun to write because I swear you can go to nearly every scene with Hero in it and find some obscure detail that relates to the master plan. The problem is that I'm the only one that understands these little literary jabs. xD If you read the whole book and then go back and reread it, then you'll probably be able to catch onto my hints.

Oh, and about why Hero saved her as a little girl--that was just coincidence. He was going around saving everyone he could, and I just focused on Ellie. Nothing special about that. :)

Yup! Regardless of my poor planning skills, I DID do a LOT of research for this story. :) Every little detail in this story is a hint and holds invaluable secrets. So if you see something that seems a little off, I probably did it on purpose. BUT still let me know just in case I really did screw up (like with what you said on how the tech had been beyond Ellie, so how could she learn it--that was my mistake, so thanks for pointing it out!)

Thanks for the comment!

:D GOOD JOB! You're catching onto the master plan. Everything you said is 100% right. (Don't tell anyone else, though. From the comments I've gotten, no one else has figured it out yet). But yeah, I dropped a lot of hints in that chapter, so all the weirdness is done on purpose. :) I won't say anything else about it so you don't get spoilers.

Thanks for the comment!
Haha, I was like, "Hm... what movie should Annie watch?" And then my friend texts me and says she's watching Aladdin, so i was like, "why not?"

Thanks again! I'm going to split that chapter into two because I'm going to put in some scenes with Ant and Joe so the divorce thing will sort of have it's own chapter maybe. But there will be progress before Ant makes that promise to Joe in the end so it won't seem as if his feelings come from nowhere. After that I can concentrate on Daniel. :D Yosh! I feel motivated now, thank you!

Dude! A valid response! Thank you! Yes, I also felt that way as the author but as someone who's never seen a divorce first hand I felt I had to go over it as quickly as possible in case someone saw how unrealistic it was. But I see that in doing so I endangered my own characters. D: Do you think there's time to fix the latest chapter? Or is the damage done? But Daniel is the story's main mystery and I purposefully make him come out at odd times. But the rest I understand I must fix. Thank you for your valuable input. Do you think I should make the divorce more vague and concentrate on building the relationship between Ant and Joe? Gah! I messed up and I should stop talking and just go fix it!!

Thank you so much for the comment!
Agh, that rapist part was a metaphor that didn't work xD I deleted it. He isn't actually a rapist. But I will definitely add something more about the brother and make him a violent, short-tempered guy in general. Thank you for pointing that out!

Aw, thank you so much! :D I'll do my best to update soon! I'm in the SuperHero writing mode right now, so let's see how long that lasts.

Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, I think I'll keep a mix of action and fluffy romance :) It's more fun to write that way, too. I'm really glad you're liking the story! I have the next chapter written, but one of my friends is doing an edit of it, so it should be up as soon as she finishes. This is so cool! The story is just pouring out of my fingers. It's a great feeling :)

Hey! Since you've shown interest in my writing before, just letting you know that I've started a new story. I'm very excited to announce that I've started posting the rewrite of The Guardian Rhapsody, now titled The Guardian Legend! This book has been my absolute life obsession since elementary school, so I'm putting everything I've got into writing it. I'd really love it if you'd check it out and tell me what you think!
http://stories.mibba.com/read/386059/The-Guardian-Legend-Book-I-Kairi/
Thanks a bunch!
-Yuffie