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I actually do have plans to write more on the story however just haven't had time to add more to it. Will let you know when I do :D

hahah yeah you're right about there being only so many story lines to go around, and it really is a lot of Danny/Ben on every page. There's even a Ronnie Radke/Tony Perry story I saw... there really is a lot of A7X stories, tons of people either write a story about them or MCR. We should petition for more AA stories!

Someone, Somewhere by Kayla Cassells - James Cassells
Calling You by The Mini Monster and it's sequel Love; The Hardest Way -Ben Bruce
Another Messy Ending by used to know. - Ben Bruce
it's kinda hard to find a good AA story that's not terribly written or a slash, but those are some of the best ones I'm subscribed to, but my fave ones would have to be Calling You and it's sequel(: hope that helps!<3

lol yes, it is:) and haha idk just Danny kinda throws me off a little bit.. idk i like the fact that they kinda hated each other at first but then started getting along, idk i'll probably change my mind a couple of times throughout the story.

Is it 12.05am for you? It's like 11.20 in the morning for me, here.

I mean, most writers have them either start off as best friends, from like eons before the story starts, and then later fall in love or realize their romantic love for one another during the story. No, I didn't mean that you played their relationship like that at all. I guess what I meant was that you played Danny out like the guy who likes a girl who doesn't see it. Kind of like the guy who gives you an apple every day for lunch in primary school, or offers to carry your bag for you or walks you home in high school. Like how he stands up for Marie, and gets mad when Ben makes her upset. It's so obvious that he likes her but Marie doesn't see it yet.

I hope what I said made at least some sense.

Well, I like how subtle you're making his crush on Marie play out. I mean, most writers, and I swear, a lot, of writers would just come out and play either the whole 'friends then fall in love' card (I do that a lot) or 'enemies first, lovers later' thing. But you don't with Danny's character and I like that.

Danny seems like the boy you know their mama's taught right. He seems to have his head and heart in the right place. I dunno whether you've intended it to play out that way but I can see that Danny and Ben's friendship go back a long way. They seem to know each other well enough to fight, without really getting into a fight, and the tension on stage is real. You know. Like, I do that when I fight with my friends. There's tension, and glaring and then in the end, you make up and get over it.

Blah. I'm rambling again. Sorry. Hehe.

No problem and you're welcome.

I think the characters do work well together. Very well. If I had to pick, I'd pick Casie though. I dunno why, I just kind of like quiet characters a lot. lol. Danny's character though, defs the cutest. You could do wonders with the characterization you have going on of him. Hehe.

No problem. :) Glad you liked it. Your story is fantastic.

I do agree! :) I find that commenting about the layout is quite frankly, pointless and not to mention, useless. And it doesn't help the author improve in anyway whatsoever in his/her writing, which is far more important. I guess some people set out not to "offend" or just can't be bothered to read through the fic or make an effort to give suggestions and offer criticism. And that's not the point of comment swap, but some people just don't get it. It's annoying. I'm flattered that you think so, thank you! :)

Thank you for making an effort to read my fic even though you're uncomfortable with the themes! I understand that it's quite a turnoff to have to read something like that. I appreciate it very much. You're right, that flows more nicely than what I've written. Thanks for the concrit! :)

I would love to but truth be told I've already started one/: I need to take that off of my profile huh? Lol

Hi there, I just read your comment on my story "To The Stage". Thank you so so much for it and I really appreciate your comment :) I think I will include their personal lives a little bit more. I do have a plot lined up in my head but I can't find the time to write at the moment. Anyways, thank you for the comment! :)

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Hey what's up?

No problem.

No problem! I agree! Yours is the first one I've stumbled upon! I can't wait to see where it goes (:

Here. I've stuck with one Person. Sorry.

That's because some of it is what she is thinking and the other is the narrator. That's just how I write. :)
I've also become so addicted to boooks, my mind will sometimes think like one, as in, my life was a whole story book, and that's part of it, too.

Thanks soo much for that story comment, it's really sweet and makes my day.
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Nice profile--and thanks for the comment. Glad someone appreciates my green day addiction :) I think I actually recognized that picture of Zacky Vengeance there. I must be getting better at this... When I first saw the Na Na Na video, I thought Grace was Ray :P