Chasing Trains - Comments

The repetition of the phrases was really powerful and enforced it into my mind, making it memorable and perhaps helping me to understand the deeper meaning of the words further with each time I read them.

I loved [i]I’m just a broken record, you’re just a broken promise.[/i] I could almost hear the sound of a record scratching and it really brought out the mood of the poem straightaway.

The last line was a powerful ending.

I think there may be a few typos, like where it says [i]And I, all have is you[/i], unless it’s supposed to be that way.

Really well done. Loved the title as well.

Wow...that was just...amazing.
Phenominal.
How can you only be 13?

I... fucking... love this.

"I don't want you locked up in my basement;
I want you buried in my backyard"
Awesome.

It was great. There were a few minor mechanical errors, but it was very unnoticable and didn't take away from the overall feel. They seemed like song lyrics.

I loved it.
♥Emily♥

OMFG!
ive read this before. *giggles*
(hehe. im not saying anything else!)
well, except for that i thought it was abosolutly amazing :]

i absoultely love the last paragraph and the last line....

the whole poem was amazing and agian i would love to see this turned into a song....

truly amazing writing style - ill always read your stuff....