There's always one line in a poem that makes you swoon.
[i]Just like he had found me.[/i]
That was a really, [i]really[/i] good line.
The rest of the poem was good, you show heaps of potential, you just need to bring that out and go out with all or nothing. When I say that, I mean; you have to put every aspect of what you're thinking, feeling and maybe doing. You need to add more! :lol:
One thing I liked, was the way you used the fire motophore, it shows that you aren't just thinking of things and writing them down straight away, you are putting more depth and meaning to it.
Just get the grip of it more and I'm sure you'll become even better than what you already are. :D
[i]Just like he had found me.[/i]
That was a really, [i]really[/i] good line.
The rest of the poem was good, you show heaps of potential, you just need to bring that out and go out with all or nothing. When I say that, I mean; you have to put every aspect of what you're thinking, feeling and maybe doing. You need to add more! :lol:
One thing I liked, was the way you used the fire motophore, it shows that you aren't just thinking of things and writing them down straight away, you are putting more depth and meaning to it.
Just get the grip of it more and I'm sure you'll become even better than what you already are. :D