Reality? - Comments

The first stanza was brill; there was nothing forced, nothing mispelled, the punctuation was...okay, but good enough to the point where it kept the flow going.

The second wasn't as great, still good, but didn't live up to the first which is a MAJOR problem to the flow of the poem. The first and second stanza's beat didn't match, and it would be a mouthfull if you were to say it out loud. The ryhming there was a bit forced, also.

But really, I think that's the only problem with it because otherwise, it was short and..."sweet", and an enjoyable read.

Nice job =]

a dark cryptic message that sounds with what everyone should do. let go and be whatever comes. i like it for such a message in such a short verse. a true sign of a gifted poet, few words, large message

[b]that was awesome, dude! Short and and to the point

xoxo[/b]

I love it to death.
its really beautiful.
One of my favorite poems on here!

i ♥

its amazing...


rOaCh...x
♥

Wow that's really good. Nice wording. =]