What?! this guy's a moron ..
First of all, The title suits the whole construction,
Second, The first line is tense sure, but it emphasizes the genesis
Third, Poetry Is the most creative type of art,
therefore, it can be created with any style,
and the author can decide what to do....
i too made poems like this when i first started,
guess what, it's not bad XD
Fourth the last verse earns it's pure closure,
and makes a LOT of sense, look at the title egghead,
AND LASTLY, why bother comment on this poem?
you can be cased of discrimination,
and yes, you have to right to criticize,
but , let the poet decide what to do.
I dont really like it , the first line breaks the rythmic pattern and the last verse seems out of place and the title "no words but just tears fall" makes little if no sense , really it should be "No words , Just tears fall" But & Just are words you dont use together. Sorry