haha get ready for your critique. Okay So the first verse makes almost perfect metric sense. Sortof. You set up a rhyme that would have been too difficult to follow through with , and so you didnt , fair enough , but if your going to rhyme you should consider having a different rhyming pattern , because the inconsistency will take away from the message behind the poem ,
No matter how badly you hurt me
No matter how much I hate you
I dont think these lines really convey the emotion behind them and they just seem clumsily structured and i think that The metric consistency is also poor you have Three three lined verses and two four lined verses which shows a confused meaning to the poem on the whole its a good poem
No matter how badly you hurt me
No matter how much I hate you
I dont think these lines really convey the emotion behind them and they just seem clumsily structured and i think that The metric consistency is also poor you have Three three lined verses and two four lined verses which shows a confused meaning to the poem on the whole its a good poem