Memory Box - Comments

  • What's in a name?

    What's in a name? (100)

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    The two first stanzas are great, the poem overall is good. I think the second stanza is awesome though. Great wording and rhythm.

    Your poem has a nice flow but it sort of falter towards the end of the last stanza. Also the third stanza sticks out a bit. Its structure makes it a bit disjointed form the rest of your poem.

    Another thing I liked however is how you repeated the line “Isn’t it expected”. That worked really well.

    Good job :D
    October 22nd, 2007 at 04:41am
  • TheFaultyStar

    TheFaultyStar (100)

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    Love the way you made it rhyme. One word Fab
    September 6th, 2007 at 10:59pm