September 13th, 2009 at 09:05pm
I really like this.
One thing: At the end, "to bad" should be "too bad."
Other than that, I like the way the line breaks are set up. It makes it read completely different and adds texture to the poem.
Very well done.
The way you broke up the words made it sound like the entire thing was an obstacle only leading up to the ultimate brick wall.
Great job.