I felt your pain. - Comments

  • kafka.

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    Reminds me of my first crush. I could never bring myself to talking to him but I was always stalking him and I certainly cared if something bad happened to him.

    I love the ending. ''I did feel your pain, I did care'' but it makes you think of emotional pain rather than just the physical one. Maybe it's your pain, not just his, the pain to see that he's hurt and maybe you could help him, but you can't do anything about it because you are afraid to tell him how you feel.

    Beautifully written.
    October 24th, 2007 at 01:34am
  • Sazor

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    thats horrible. but amazingly written. Cry Clap
    October 16th, 2007 at 02:46pm
  • Welshiee

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    omg.. Cry thats so sad yet amazing... you're really an awesome poet spammy,
    I love your work (8
    September 27th, 2007 at 01:16am
  • Robin Sparkles

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    Such a sad poem. =[ It was a good one though.

    I will agree and say that the eyes thing is a bit repetitive, but well done altogether. =D
    September 26th, 2007 at 08:19pm
  • Becci's_Back

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    that was really good, sad, but really good :D
    September 24th, 2007 at 01:05am
  • Fueled By Dana

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    This is amazing! You're a really good writer.
    September 24th, 2007 at 12:07am
  • bethlynBACKLASH

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    wow that was really good.... sad...... but good!
    September 22nd, 2007 at 05:33am
  • peter quill.

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    [b]Awww, that was so sad.

    But um yet again another fantastic poem :]
    Ily Spammy.[/b]
    September 22nd, 2007 at 03:44am
  • Kid-2

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    The rhyming is good and the concept and story is sad. But I just have one crit...that you speak too often about his eyes. It's quite cleche and repetitive, it sounds almost like there is nothing else to this boy. Which I know can't be true if you chose to write about him (real or made-up) So then to me, all I want to see is that you show me what makes you love him.

    But well done, I really enjoyed it.
    September 21st, 2007 at 11:24pm
  • sullen riot.

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    Oh Spammy... :hug:
    I'm sorry. It must have been hard... But the poem's wonderful. I love the rhyme and rhythm in this - my poetry usually just goes all over the place.
    Awesome work, you're a fantastic poet.
    September 21st, 2007 at 09:41pm