Sinister Prowler. - Comments

God the decription in this poem was...wow...and it felt so....real...God. That has to be one of my favs.

Amazing;; you made me shiver.

Darling you are good with fantasy and incoperting it to the real world.

Kudos to the maximium.

My favorite line would be
Like a dead bird from the sky, she drops the the floor.

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Sorry it took so long to comment back :(

Though I agree with [b]Capt' Jack Harkass[/b] with everything she said, I will actually write my own review and put some effort into it.

Your descriptions were amazing , though somewhat a b it too extravagant for a poem.

[b]Like a dead bird from the sky, she drops to the floor.[/b]
Oh my god, how I loved that simile.

The concept was brilliant, at first I was decieved to think that the object in question was a wild animal or so while in fact he was a vampire.
Fantastic, really.[/i]

That poem was the sports car in amongst all the space-hoppers of blood-reltaed stories.

Couple of things I wanted to say:

1. There were two things I could see that were slight mistakes in it. Or they could be intentional.

The first one was the sudden change in narrative at:

[i]as he glides towards the human;
Oh, humans...[/i]

It changes from third to first. i dunno if that's intentional or if you want to put quotation marks in there.

The second thing is that there are two full stops after 'coming'. Is that a stop or an ellipsis? Just wondering as they can be different effects.

2. [i]White thin snakes emerge around the woman's throat[/i]

I love this sentence so much it hurts. It also continues with teh idea of attack as we think of attacking snakes with their fangs.

Brilliant!

This is....wow.
Your descriptions are [i] phenomenal [/i], let me tell you that.
As I was reading it, I could really feel everything that was occurring. Extraordinary.
I wish I could write poetry as beauitful - I think [i] everybody [/i] does.
You've got a real gift.
Good job! -applauds-

that really was, so real, it was amazing, your choice of words,
and your description work, were both really good.
amazing job.
im off to read your other poems :D
btw, ive got another one up xD

That was really good. I liked it.

It felt so real. O_O Good job!

wow. WOW. it was so, so REAL.

[b]Loved it again.
Reminded me of the poem we read in English today :/[/b]

:shock: wow that was awesome
i really really likey 8)