This is pretty good, as well. Although I still did find a few mistakes. "No one has failed to stop me" - wouldn't that mean that someone would have stopped you?...the way that was worded was just...confusing.
I love how you used the moon in this to add imagery - not only to the character's surroundings but also to the way she views herself. It's really beautiful.
I still suggest going back and editing it, but it is really good. I really do enjoy your poems. :)