I don't go for 'intimate poems' so I don't particularly know how to judge this, although the rhyme scheme works well, and it was to the point.
I'm sorry, I'm just not very good in this department... =/
This is really, really good! It has real nice tone/rythm thing going.
Hmmm.... I'll have to wait for other entries before you can be an official winner though!
I'm sorry, I'm just not very good in this department... =/