December 1st, 2009 at 07:49am
Wordplay! Oh, Wordplay!
I love this poem. I think that to take a cliche like "oh, no, I'm alone and sad, help" and turn it into something original is truly a skill. I'm not going to critique it--I feel that ultimately, to make small choices for you is micromanaging what should be YOUR poem--but I will tell you that I love this poem. Kind of like a "Things They Carry" sort of deal.
Crayon Eater