I Feel The Life - Comments

This poem is bleeding with emotion. It's wrapped in heartbreak of the worst kind. It gives off the feeling of being utterly alone, anger, afraid, and not knowing what to do to change anything.

"You're the reason I'm here, with my blood on the floor, you're the reason I'm dying, with my friends calling me whore." It's horrible when you choose someone over yourself, over your friends, only to have it lead up to nothing but hurt in the end. I've sacrificed what others have thought of me in order to be with someone I loved. I don't think people ever truly realize the depth of that sacrifice.

"What was I to you? A time filler, a quick kiss? Did I mean anything? Or someone you'll never miss?" Out of the poem, those are my favorite lines. They flow so beautifully, and they really strike home with me. I ask myself that question concerning a lot of people from my past. Not just in a romantic way.

The way you reiterate the first few lines that began the poem, with just the last line contrasting finishes it all off well. I often encounter poems that end in such a way that it feels incomplete. Though the end is sudden and blunt, it brings everything stated before it to a crescendo.

This is a very personal poem written while at the edge of heartache. Great work!

Wow, I guess I have some competition for the "I Gave you love, you gave me lies" contest.

Here's my entry:

http://poem.mibba.com/139812/The-Loser-I-Once-Was-At-Least-To-My-Ex-Friends

Please check it out and leave a comment.

Wow. Its honestly all I can say. This is Amazing!!

This is the most amazing poem I've ever red. It's really emotional and amazingly deep. And its the exact feeling I'm having now. This is the best poem I've ever seen.