The Loser I Once Was- At Least To My Ex-Friends - Comments

This was a really great poem. It had so much emotion and power behind every single word; it lingers in one's mind. Your last stanza pulls the entire poem together wonderfully and it's just a really well-written piece.

I completely know what you mean. I went through almost the exact same thing in 7th grade.
Congrats on making it through, on finding friends.
Freat poem, it's written really well. :)

First of all, I can't imagine how difficult it was for you to write this. I don't think I've read many poems as candid as this one. It must have been challenging to bring forth those memories in order to write about this event, especially when it happened years ago. That is very brave of you.

"Finally, only they said soundlessly, 'Goodbye'." I know that silent farewells can be the worst. Though no one really likes experiencing the pain and awkwardness of a verbal goodbye, it really does help with closure. It was low of them to just leave you hanging.

"After that, I went on through the rest of 7th and 8th grade friendless." How horrible! I'm so sorry you went through that. That has to be so painful for you to recall. Reading that line brings a feeling of emptiness to my chest.

"I thought myself to be a loser then, because who could not be one who doesn't have any friends?"

That is my favorite line out of this poem. It reveals utter vulnerability, and it shows the flawed logic that so many of us have. I know I can relate to that thought process, and I'm sure dozens of others can, too.

Next, you tell of something more positive, making the above the rock bottom of the poem; the point where you lost yourself because those so called "friends" left you. But now you're giving yourself another chance with new people.

After showing the light at the end of the tunnel, you return to make it clear that the scars of the past will never leave you. You also show that you know that what they did was wrong, given your new found reaction of anger. I hope that you have let go of the false belief that you were a loser because you had no friends.

You touch on your attempts to forget, but admit it isn't working, finally coming to a hollow feeling of acceptance that you can't. I love the ending line. It completes the poem well.

Bravo! I commend you on your courage. Thank you for sharing your poem with me. :)

wow i do have some competition

you shouldnt be such a good writer gaaaaawdd x

Thanks for the comment on my poem. Your poem is great and tells a story.

haha I can relate to this, in a way :) good luck to the both of us in the contest!!!

hey, thanks for the poem comment :)
oh well, your poem is good.

Thanks. This really happened to me in 7th grade. I'm in 10th grade now, but I still remember it.

Powerfull! Its really good.