October 24th, 2010 at 04:47am
World Behind My Wall - Comments
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I loved it. It was quite beautiful. :O It flows really well and I just love it.October 20th, 2010 at 01:20am
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I always love repetition of certain lines in a poem. It adds a lot of emphasis and almost a musical feel to it. And I love that you added "Welcome to the world behind my wall" at the end; it gives a really nice final note to the piece.
I did notice a few grammatical errors; "angry" as a noun should be "anger" and "keep it hid" should be keep it "hidden;" but other than that, it flows well and I like the tone you've taken with this. It's something a lot of people can relate to.October 11th, 2010 at 07:41pm -
I really, really like this poem, and I agree with the comment under mine, the whole "The world behind my wall." thing, brilliant.October 11th, 2010 at 07:40pm
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I really liked this poem,
It was interesting how you ended each part with "The world behind my wall."
:)October 10th, 2010 at 06:15pm -
I love it! I like how you had [b]The world behind my wall[/b] after every few lines....I didn't see any mistakes in here, kinda was a little confussing at some points but thats probably just me XD...this was amazing! And applies to a lot of people! BRAVO! You are a very talented writer!October 10th, 2010 at 05:13pm
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I really like this, its a beautiful peom.December 18th, 2009 at 06:40am
The concept was great, and so was the result.
There were some grammatical errors, as some pointed out, but other than that, it was really very good.