That Time - Comments

ShadowAngel (100)

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OOHHHH! My heart just broke

October 27th, 2010 at 12:43am

nickmario (100)

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i like how you ryhmed the words... its a poem that i think it isnt obvious enough for the reader to understand everything, but thats how 90% of mine are :)

March 10th, 2010 at 02:50am

guardian_angel (100)

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This is so true :(
I love it though!

December 22nd, 2009 at 04:47pm

TheOtherMe (100)

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pretty good, i agree that the repeating adds to it. i like it.

December 21st, 2009 at 04:58am

xxdorylovexx (105)

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I really like it. I think the repeating of the Of the time really adds to like the effectiveness of the entire poem!

December 20th, 2009 at 02:11am