She's taking him away - Comments

I dunno how this kid could forget about you, you're writing is amazing! i doubt he did anyway. [:
but yeah I agree with vvvvvv on the second sentence but other than that, this poem rocks. oh, and the first sentence is my favorite. i love your writing, keep up the poemss. :D

Don't feel bad. If he can leave you so easily, he can probably leave her just as fast. She might just have something that's enticing at the moment.

Critique: There's some awkward sentences... like the second one. However, I think it's a great poem. Plus it's relatable so what else do you need, really? :-)