"Cuz I miss you so" change this to because. Slang is not meant for poems or writing ever. You have a talent for wording, but where you lack if the emotion. You always put enough emotion into your writing where it isn't dull but never enough for your reader to feel the emotions. You can tell what the emotion is from the wording but you don't connect with the reader.
August 24th, 2010 at 09:22am