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I love the subject but the way you've presented it needs work.
When you read it out loud, I think you would benefit from a good rhythm scheme, ideally iambic tetrameter. Some of the lines are too short, some too long and it jars.
But it has a lot of potential.
January 15th, 2010 at 08:00pm
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When you read it out loud, I think you would benefit from a good rhythm scheme, ideally iambic tetrameter. Some of the lines are too short, some too long and it jars.
But it has a lot of potential.