February 6th, 2010 at 05:36am
Ooh I like this one too! The only part Im not to crazy about is the 3rd stanza, just the feet/defeat rythmn is off cause the words are too close to rhyming I guess. Theres a term for that but Im blanking out on what it is, you know when two words are spelt differently but pronounced the same...
Perhaps if you rearrange the sentence- put about being swept off your feet first, by a prince charming, then you could possibly find a word to rhyme with charming? But I dunno.
Anyway, Good job with it!
Good job =P