Craving for my Vampire Love - Comments

the idea is good, but you needn't use the verb 'crave' throughout. It would be more effective to use syndetic or asyndetic listing ( asyndetic - use commas, syndetic using 'and' etc). e.g
I crave your touch,
your love,
your immortal kiss,
your velvet voice -
I crave my bliss.
Also just be a bit more creative and have confidence x3

comment plz!!!!! tell me what you think about the poem! plz!!!
And if its wrong in any way. plz correct me. I want to improve!!!!!!