so far favorite it holds a bit more originality than the others and some of the stuff out there and it's a different scheme which is a bit refreshing.
I might suggest breaking it away at the commas still having 3 stanzas but 2 lines in each but that's just personal preference for flow otherwise like I said so far my favorite of yours.
I might suggest breaking it away at the commas still having 3 stanzas but 2 lines in each but that's just personal preference for flow otherwise like I said so far my favorite of yours.