I like individual sections of this poem and that makes it very good, yet there are moments when the flow is lacking the intensity. I'm thinking that, because there are so many strengths in this poem, parts that don't quite have as strong of an effect are more noticeable.
An example is when you randomly jump to, "what of reality". Perhaps a use of stanzas would make tone shifts more smooth or anticipated by the reader.
Ooh, I loved this.
Normally, I don't read poetry much, but this one really caught my eye.
[i]It is only what you make it
And what you want it to be
Be wary, as the curtains fall
Is this your first, or final bow?[/i]
- this.
This is it. I love it!
An example is when you randomly jump to, "what of reality". Perhaps a use of stanzas would make tone shifts more smooth or anticipated by the reader.