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  • The Doctor

    The Doctor (105)

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    I like individual sections of this poem and that makes it very good, yet there are moments when the flow is lacking the intensity. I'm thinking that, because there are so many strengths in this poem, parts that don't quite have as strong of an effect are more noticeable.
    An example is when you randomly jump to, "what of reality". Perhaps a use of stanzas would make tone shifts more smooth or anticipated by the reader.
    January 13th, 2011 at 03:27am
  • oathkeeper.

    oathkeeper. (100)

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    Wonderful.

    I can't really describe it in any other words. Even that one seems to fail for me.
    September 25th, 2010 at 12:52am
  • PurpleStain

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    Ooh, I loved this.
    Normally, I don't read poetry much, but this one really caught my eye.

    [i]It is only what you make it
    And what you want it to be
    Be wary, as the curtains fall
    Is this your first, or final bow?[/i]
    - this.
    This is it. I love it!
    May 19th, 2010 at 01:52am
  • StrangeBrainActivity

    StrangeBrainActivity (100)

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    This is pretty well written poetry. Kudos.
    April 20th, 2010 at 07:52am