You Taste Like Wild Wine - Comments

I love, love, love the line 'You look like a point of view."
Although I don't like the word 'travelling" it's too-- i don't know really. It's hard to find something to say after 'angle of a hand' which is a beautiful cluster of words that makes everything after it seem lesser. And it just seem a shame to end such a beautiful poem on a less-than-perfect note.

good, but still bit creepy. although good, maybe if you had extended it a bit more you could've fit more in. but it is up to you.

wow this is really good!
i wish i could write like you:)