First of all, I like how this is one of the few pieces around that isn't all about teen angst (like I can complain, because that's a huge theme for me, but shh... hypocricy is fun ¬_¬).
And then, just... I really liked it. The style, the words themselves, the irritating "I like how it flowed" line.
And the part about when then working class actually worked? I like that. It's original, it's cute and, erm...