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haha "but you have a pretty face, and a nice voice." that makes me think of Patrick. anyways... loverly poem! it's like it's almost being blunt, without being really straightforward at all... if that makes sense. oh well. I love it :]

I really like reading poems. This one was very beautiful.

"If this doesn't stir
something in your chest
I'm sure
it will crush the electricity
in your pants."

This was my favorite stanza. As said before, I like the way the sentences are broken, to me it makes me think the character is angry, or sad-something negative. It does seem like she fell in love the wrong way-because it says "Love use to be so much harder than this." Very nice, and very deep.

Ohkay, this is pretty fantastic. I will forever be a fan of your interesting phrasing and scheme. It's definately original. I adore it, which is better than love by like three billion points. w00t. :D

This is really deep a and I love how you've written it with short verses and broken sentences. I think you've created a really interesting character who is using love in the wrong way and this persons emotions and story really comes through in your poem. I absolutely love this.

Holy shift.
It has the Ivy charm, and it's one of my favorites.
It's just so amazing, and kinda dark and bitter, almost.
I love it.

This was really good. To tell you the truth I think it may be one of my favorite poems I've read. It flowed so well. Utterly amazing

I don't usually read poems, but this was amazing. I could feel all the emotions in this and it was also very descriptive! Like [b]savannah kay;[/b] said: this did make my heart beat a little faster. You have a wonderful way with words. Great job! (:

I feel like the "in your pants" comments were a little blunt and kinda took away from the otherwise FANTASTIC poem. Great metaphors. "The only thing shared is a room number." I really liked that line. Keep it up.

Wow, this was amazing. I think my heart beat a little faster. :) It does suck how love isn't what it used to be and now it's just about who can get the most dick. :/ Anyway, I liked the short, kind of abrupt way you did it. It reminded me of this book written in free verse that I got for free from Simon Pulse and I loved that book...and this poem. :)

Whoaaow I really like this poem.. very well done! :D

Its tragic how love now is so different from how it used to be... :/