Abstract World. - Comments

I agree with all of the comments on this poem.
It is truly a good poem, one that only a mind with great talent could create.

Oh my, this is beautiful.

From first to last stanza, it was so...gorgeous?

My favorite lines:

I look out of my window, I only see clouds -
covering the sky as if it's got something to hide.

I touch my face; what's become of me?

my mind has finally realised;
that I am merely a ghost.


I like how all of the confusion wraps up all at the end; the realization was a perfect ending. This is stunning.

I love this.

It's sort of like a cross between poetry and prose... a plot detailed enough to be a story, but able to make such a beautiful poem.

I adore how it reads as such a mature and objective piece of work. It's not angsty, but an honest account that could have been from the point of view of anyone (although I get the distinct feeling that the person is female?). There's a hint of feminity throughout, and a slightly romanticised and tragic aspect, but it's done with style.

I like the different settings each stanza portrays... atmosphere, emotion. It's really beautiful, and the last line was fantastic... [i]merely[/i], I think that one word added so much to the line.

And yeah, I definitely agree with Bullshit That !, it was a powerful piece of work.

Wonderfully written.
Now, that's something I'd always love to see int the poems section.
I love the ending...
[i]that I am merely a ghost[/i]

Powerful.