Reflections - Comments

I really love the various uses of repetition throughout the piece, and how some lines rhyme and others don't. (I tend not to much like poems that rhyme all the way through; they come out sounding forced, but none of your rhymes do, which is kind of awesome.)

And the lines:

[i]A desert into woodlands, tears into trees.
All consuming hunger brings a world to its knees.
Can a castle breed beauty, or does it all fall flat?
There are some questions I cannot ask.[/i]

I absolutely loved those.

And the last two lines are beautiful, and wrap up the piece so well.

This just broke my heart, but ohmygracious. I loved it.
The off-and-on choppy flow was amazing.
Loveddd it.<3 (:

A) This was an amazing poem, b) D: it's so sad and beautiful, c) I loved the way some of it was really choppy, and some was rather descriptive. Perfect, darling.