February 1st, 2011 at 05:15pm
This is absolutely amazing.
The first 4ish lines are so strong that you can't help but read further and further.
I also really like the line "the poor puppet's too forcefully bound", which is how a lot of readers feel. Everyone at some point in their life has felt this way and its wonderful how you've used the imagery of a puppet. It makes it easy for readers to relate to you.
This is wonderfully written, I read it like six times just because I couldn't get enough of it:)
I love love loveeeeee this poem and the rest of your work!
For the sake of Mibba, write more:)
compliments: If you look at all my criticisms they’re mainly about little things, almost more preferences than actual criticisms. That’s because I couldn’t find much to criticize in the many times I read your poem. It’s great, just wonderful. The imagery you used was beautiful and the metaphor was beautifuk. You painted the picture vividly for me. The topic of the poem is so relatable and you communicate it to the reader beautifully and clearly. I seemed to be using the word beautiful a lot. It’s just a great poem. Love it.