It's fantastic!
It all flows really well, and I can relate to it. Also, you can feel the desperation (or manybe that isn't the words I want... need?) in it.
Great job :)
[i]well[/i] = [i]we'll[/i]. :]
I really like it. And I haven't got much else to say, because I think you've used a decent amount of punctuation, and there are no other errors. :]
Naw, I like the topic, and the story. :] It's really good, and how the title plays a huge part in it. :]