The Blind Man - Comments

I was left breathless... This is beautiful!

Omg that was like amazing. I was moved and absolutely stunned. Great job !

This is amazing. I like the format because its....mixed up without being messy or random? You keep the same number of lines but mix up how long each line is. I like it, a lot. I think it works for your style of writing.
its honestly a pretty inspiring to me haha, because I write myself. Its just so different but flows perfectly

My state of thought is absentee so I am afraid I can't provide a very good comment, but it was really awesome. Makes me not mind losing my sight.

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i really really like this one. composition = perfect.

I enjoy your writing because it's more complex then the average. It plainly states thing but also makes you pick them apart.

I think my favorite part of this poem would have to be the third stanza.
This man, he sat.
Sat in the shadows of what he thought he knew,
Thinking on and on but to no avail.

That to me just hold a lot of meaning and power behind the words. Great job on this poem. Hopefully you'll write more and post them on this site for me and others to read.
~Reena

Your writing is quite unique. There was no rhythmic flow, no intention of rhyme(obviously), but you still delivered despite it lacking those characteristics. I do know that poetry isn't all about meters or syllables or any fancy rhyming, but I claim poetry to be great if it uses metaphors, creating imagery that demonstrates a point in a way that's odd yet smart and clever. I like the last stanza, partially because it's the last one I can remember without having to close this box and go over what I've read again, because of the metaphor you used to describe his cloudy solitude that devoured his life, the life he chose to waste away.

I can see you writing better works. Use metaphors to your advantage and(since I know you write using a fact-based method) experiment with meter and rhyme.