My Inferno - Comments

i love how this tells a story. i like it :)

I just bought Dante's "The Inferno" two days ago :3 I had read bits of it in Humanities a few years back.
Anyway, your poem is pretty good. Better than most of the rubbish on the site. There are a few things you could improve however. What I mostly noticed was how you tried to throw in modern terms with a style that you said was based off of Dante's work. It would be fine, if it weren't so randomly done. Examples are when you said "burglar alert" and "referee". They stand out in an unintentional way because everything else you're writing about is mainly from long ago.

I hope you wanted criticism ._. That's why I go on here.
Bye~