We Do Not Forget Betrayal - Comments

I like it a lot, although it's quite sad. It seems like a great poem. The other person mentioned spelling errors, and all make them, so don't worry about it. And I actually like the retie our untied ties because it makes sense and flows well, in my opinion, but you could always change it if you wanted. Great job!

This is not a bad poem, and the rhyme is quite imaginative, but your spelling and grammar is not very good. I think you mean 'Betrayal'. Also, retie our untied ties? Perhaps you could use a thesaurus, because that sounds..awkwardly put.