It's a really wonderfully dark poem and although it's sort of ambiguous in it's placement or situation, it is very gripping.. I loved your choice to repeat certain ideas or certain words within each stanza. I think it really breaks up the thoughts to really express the kind of.. I want to say devastated nature of the poem, but devastated kind of implies really intense emotion and I felt this kind of numbness within the speaker when reading it..
My favourite parts were the second and last stanzas.. The second because of the almost-cryptic word-choice to describe what's happening and the last stanza because of how real it felt.. (I can just picture myself falling away into this state of broken defeat you've portrayed.. It's beautiful)
And finally, how the title just wraps up the entire idea of the poem. Another great choice.
What a wonderful poem.. I will definitely have to get to reading more from you. <3
I loved this.
It's a really wonderfully dark poem and although it's sort of ambiguous in it's placement or situation, it is very gripping.. I loved your choice to repeat certain ideas or certain words within each stanza. I think it really breaks up the thoughts to really express the kind of.. I want to say devastated nature of the poem, but devastated kind of implies really intense emotion and I felt this kind of numbness within the speaker when reading it..
My favourite parts were the second and last stanzas.. The second because of the almost-cryptic word-choice to describe what's happening and the last stanza because of how real it felt.. (I can just picture myself falling away into this state of broken defeat you've portrayed.. It's beautiful)
And finally, how the title just wraps up the entire idea of the poem. Another great choice.
What a wonderful poem.. I will definitely have to get to reading more from you. <3