If You Really Love Me - Comments

This is really cute. :) The rhyme and rhythm are fairly steady, and the repetition is a nice touch. I like it!

I am judging for the contest :D

What I liked: The rhyme was pretty good - most of it didn't sound forced. I like how you repeated the "If you really love me" as though the person might doubt it.

What I disliked: Some of the lines were too long and didn't fit very well - if they were shortened, the poem would flow better.

This is really good. I like the rhyme of it a lot. I just have 2 complaints. When you say "Because it is what both of us must say" I feel like it'd sound better as "Because it's what both of us must say" just to make it flow a little better.
I also think maybe "When the world makes me feel weak and small" could be better as "When I feel weak and small."
But that could just be me. No reason to do what I sya at all. You are the poet.
Beautiful, otherwise.
I love it.

its good

-Judging for a contest-
Excellent choice of words and carefully thought out structure. Each stanza held it's own message and could stand on its own as a short poem. The rhyming and rhythm in this poem was excellent - I could read it over and over again. The subject was extremely relatable, the voice of the poem clear. The last line was definitely the best and very powerful, tying the whole poem together. Clever repetition of the title throughout. A pleasure to read! :)

This is extrealy cute and i love it

haha that is so cute! :)