Heart Ache Over Head Ache. - Comments

This was really good, I love poems.
And like some people said I'm a little confused on why some lines being with a lower-case and some dont, but I'm guessing thats how its suppose to be, either way its still a great poem.
And my favorite line was [i] So I'll link the shadow of what you use to be[/i]
really love that line.
Overall great poem :)

Ahhhhh it's the one that I love! The flow is just fantastic, and the words are just amazing... It has to be my favorite poem of yours!

So I'll ink the shadow
of who you use to be

That was my favorite part. Really, your words and phrasing are so eloquent. The dictation was beautiful, and just, this entire piece was stunning. I also love your sense of irony, as in your narrator was feeling claustrophobic in their, "Too Big, Too Quiet" apartment. At least, that's what I took from it.

I'm gonna start of by saying that usually, I don't read poetry. I'm not a fan and it usually doesn't caputre my attention.

That being said, I really dig this. I loved the repetition and the vocabulary you chose to use, and I also love the spacing and where you chose to separate the lines. I would love to hear this poem read out-loud.

Over all, very good job!

I really liked the third and fifth stanzas- these details paint a wonderful, artistic picture, and the bit about the shadow was very well expressed. The repetition of 'Too Big, Too Quiet', and the way this is capitalised is also really striking, and very effective, I thought.

I am a little confused as to why some lines begin with a lower-case letter, and some lines do not end with any punctuation, but I'm assuming this was deliberate, perhaps to add some irrationality to the overall feel of it.

I don't read that many good poems on Mibba, but this is one of them. Well done!

First of all, I love the repetition about the too big too quiet apartment. It creates such atmosphere, you don't even know. Very eloquent, longing, dark. As you know, my favorite are the lines about the getting rid of the silence that got rid of you. I love backward speach action. It's tight. <3

<3 You know how to make people fall in love with the computer screen and letters.