This poem is full of wonderful ideas and phrases and I have to say, the repetition does not pull from the strength and meaning, rather emphasizes the fact that humanity is weak and lacking in so many things. Your word choice is great and it just adds to what you're trying to say. There are a few spelling/grammar issues, but that happens when typing and sometimes they are intentional (sometimes I just can't tell). All in all this is a great poem! I especially like how you pull certain things to greater attention by capitalizing them. It just adds to the meaning!
October 13th, 2011 at 06:56pm