Front Door/Concrete Steps - Comments

this one was an interesting read. I had pondered and come to the same conclusion at one time or another. I love the way you are able to use your words so carefully and worded so eloquently that you don't need to write a lot to get the meaning of your words expressed in your writing. i honestly wished I had your talent for writing so simply and yet that doesn't deferr to the concepts you talk about and how they are certainly more complicated than the simple format they are written in. I love the imagery I get from this poem. It really shows alot and in just a few lines you've placed the human race into a whole new light it seems, one of whcih i agree with time and again. I honestly really enjoy your writing and I truly can't say that enough as well as to keep writing. I truly enjoy your work.

This almost reads like a short story. You learn so much about these two people - the speaker and other person - in such a short amount of time. I love how much you can express with only a few words. Very good.

Very well done! ♥

I thought this was fantastic, but I fell that it could be cleaned a LITTTTLLLLLEEE bit. First off, you spelled smiled wrong. It isn't a big thing, but spelling does make a difference. ^.^ Also When you are talking about the little friend asking for candy, I would suggest "asking for candy" instead of "ask for candy". It flows better and sort of completes that stanza more. Other than that, I thought it was wonderfully done!

wonderful. thoughtful. definitely what i'd expect from what i've known of you.
you see so much in ordinary things and portray these wonders so well to us. i dont think i have ever met someone who could successfully write about the little thought on history of front porches. i really respect your writing style and i really love reading your work.

this is diffrint but works relly well! good job x

i love it!!!!

I really like this and I don't usually like non-rhyming poems. You opened the poem wonderfully. I love the second stanza, but *smiles.
The Muddy parts are amazing, great job. I especially love the last few lines.
Any criticism I guess would be... grammar. Which really doesn't detract at all to the poem.
Love it♥

Wonderfully written. I really like how this flows and the descriptions you used in it. It feels like it has a deeper meaning though at first(to me at least) it appears as something simpler.

Beautifully worded and the sentences structured wonderfully.

It reminded of an intro to a story, which I loved and it had a great sense of mystery.

It was orginal and I absolutely think there should be more poems like this.

i really enjoy this poem! it's so different (in a good way of coarse!) i just loved your word choice and the way you made it all flow! this is a great poem! :)

I really liked how this started, how the words were flowign in a certain way and how simple it was only with a more complex kinda meaning, I think. I dunno, I just really liked it.

Especially the ending! :) It was great! More soon?

I really liked this the pauses where set in just the right places. It wasn't really significant through the first read but by the second end I was like this really does give a nice subtle emphasis on the over all of everything.

I liked this because it also felt like the intro to a story people I wanted to learn more about see and experience more. I think you should write a poetic one shot with this on the title page and leave the story vague yet full of a message it would be a hit. I also liked the alliteration but I think that was unintentional? =]

This was interesting, I got some religious feel to it as well as the Halloween season out of it. Kind of like asking a question but like not sure what it is for certain. I love how the stanza's are put together, it makes it seem more well thought out. The wording is beautiful, good work.