Expiration - Comments

Amazing Poem! <3

love it

this is good :)
keep posting

this is soo good! Keep posting:)

beautifully written.

I really like the story behind this poem. Those seemingly simple eleven lines, which aren't simple at all (if that makes sense), have so much feeling in them. Each and every line embodies a different emotion - but in the end, they all mean the same thing. It's amazing how you manage to paraphrase one feeling so well.

Though now that I've read it again, it's not just the feeling of desire, but loss as well. I guess the title of this poem contains the latter.
A "good" and "bad" feeling combined as one.

That was great.

Wow.. this is amazing, and beautiful.
I really like it.

i love the idea of breathing the temptation and desire for this person instead of oxygen, it gives the feeling as if her presence robs the air of oxygen and all you can breath is her. i really like it nice poem